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    Becoming Visible

    Post by Lee on Fri Jun 11, 2010 7:03 pm

    Becoming Visible

    Ariel knows that she isn’t the prettiest one of her friends, in fact she feels like the ugliest.
    She has seen her friends go through multiple relationships and always felt awkward.
    She feels no one will ever care about her and that she is invisible.
    She has liked her guy friend, Kyle, for almost two years.
    But, he only sees her as a friend and is dating one of her best friends, Brenda.
    All she wants is a guy to make her feel special for once.
    Then she meets an average guy named Theo, who is annoying and obnoxious.
    She doesn’t want anything to do with him but he seems to always be around.
    Throughout junior year she’ll go through heartache, fights, and drama.
    But by the end she’ll realize who will actually be there for her and who will end up disappointing her.

    AN: Eh, new story idea for kicks. Chapter one will be up soon.
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    Post by Lee on Fri Jun 11, 2010 7:30 pm

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    Post by Lee on Fri Jun 11, 2010 8:22 pm

    Chapter One: My Life



    “Ariel watch out!” My friend Brenda yelled at me. I whip my head around to see what she was talking about and smack, a white object hits me right in the face. I fall to the ground with a loud thump.

    “Shit Brenda what did you do?” Suzie yells.

    She says, “Nothing the volleyball just smacked her in the face. I didn’t mean to it, it was an accident.”

    I blink my eyes open and my friends standing on top of me all merge into each other through my vision. Jeez, I thought, why did I have to be friends with people who were good at sports? As I tried to get up I fell back down on my butt.

    Kyle grabbed my hand, “Gosh you’re such a loser sometimes.”

    I protested, “Well sorry I’m not the next Beckham like you are Mr. I’m Amazing At Every Sport.”

    He chuckled and pulled me up all the way. I wiped the dirt off the back of my butt and Brenda rushed up to me.

    She said, “Oh my gosh Ariel! I am so so so sorry! I didn’t mean for the ball to hit you. I just-“

    I stopped her mid-sentence, “Brenda, breathe. It’s not that big of a deal. I’m not bleeding or in need of going to the hospital.”

    She chuckled, “You’re so strong, if that were me I would have been crying like a baby.”

    I nodded my head in agreement and being childish I said, “Race you guys to the swings!”

    We all ran from the volleyball court to the swing set in the playground. My black Converse started to become untied but I kept running anyway. Running was the only sport I was actually good at, that’s why I was ahead of all my friends.

    I heard a voice from behind me, “And from behind Kyle Fort starts to make his way to first place. He pushes past Suzie, Brenda, and finally Ariel!”

    His navy Nikes surpass me and he jumps onto one of the swings. I cross my arms and say to him, “Come on you totally cheated!”

    Suzie and Brenda aren’t even half way here yet. He smirks at me, “Just because I beat you doesn’t mean you need to get all jealous.”

    I stick my tongue out at him and say, “I’m not jealous when I know I’m better than you.”

    Then he challenges me and takes a few steps closer to me, "We'll just have to see about that."

    Both of our faces are less than inch away. Then we hear Brenda shout, “Gosh! You guys are like running champions compared to Suzie and me. I’m so bad at this.”

    We instantly pull away and Kyle walks over to her, “But it’s okay because you’re good at other things.” Then he pulls her in for a long kiss.

    I sigh and when they pull away I just smile at them. What no one knows is that I have a crush on Kyle. He is my best guy friend and I know it’s so cliché but I don’t know what it is about him. The way he smiles or his kind words to me when I am hurt or his eyes I could look into forever. Only there’s one problem, he’s dating my friend Brenda. And this suckish story is my life.

    AN: Ok, I know this is REALLY REALLY cliche so far but it will stray away from the usual teenager-movie path.
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    Post by Braelyn. on Sat Jun 12, 2010 6:56 pm

    Sometimes it's okay to be cliche:)
    But don't worry,
    I have no doubt you can stray from the path.
    So far,
    it's awesome writing,
    and you have me hooked.
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    Post by Lee on Sat Jun 12, 2010 7:00 pm

    haha thanks :]
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    Post by charlotte . on Wed Jun 16, 2010 9:28 pm

    misslee, you should continue this. :]
    because it's been several days since you updated.
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    Post by Lee on Thu Jun 17, 2010 12:08 am

    haha ik i've had all finals and shit
    i plan to add some more tommorrow (:



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    Post by charlotte . on Thu Jun 17, 2010 12:49 am

    yay(:

    your siggie thing is funny.
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    Post by Lee on Thu Jun 17, 2010 12:22 pm

    Haha thanks (:



    Give me pain if thats what's real, it's the price we pay to feel♥️

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    Post by charlotte . on Thu Jun 17, 2010 2:13 pm

    but i love the quote.
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    Post by Lee on Fri Jun 18, 2010 11:21 am

    haha n2n<3



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    Post by charlotte . on Fri Jun 18, 2010 2:01 pm

    my volleyball sweatshirt has n2n on it(:
    cause we got personalized ones.
    so it says 'be n2n' :]

    totally spamming here x]
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    Post by amber- on Fri Jun 18, 2010 2:07 pm

    I like this, Lee.
    I hope you continue. :]
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    Post by Lee on Sat Jun 19, 2010 12:40 pm

    ahha char i love youu<3
    and thanks amber (: I need to start writing again haha



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    Post by charlotte . on Sat Jun 19, 2010 8:08 pm

    love you toos(:

    i was totally gonna say 'toes' x]

    yes.
    you should write more. :]
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    Post by BroadwayB on Sat Jun 19, 2010 10:36 pm

    Great story, you should really continue it! Plus, I love cliches! Lol, seriously though, you do need to continue.
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    Post by Lee on Sun Jun 20, 2010 12:34 am

    haha thanks guys (:



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