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    Post by chronic Thu Jan 20, 2011 7:25 pm

    C L A S H .

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    1974. A crazy fucking year. The year my band and I made it real big. We were on
    top of the world. We had the girls, the money, the lifestyle. Everything was perfect.
    And then, it all broke down.

    *This might be kind of a mature story... it deals with sex and drugs.
    **It's not that good, I'm just in the mood to write a story. I'd love feedback because I know it's bad. I just haven't written in a while




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    Post by chronic Thu Jan 20, 2011 7:26 pm

    CONTENTS


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    Post by kel$ey Thu Jan 20, 2011 8:05 pm

    Can't wait wifeyy<3
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    Post by chronic Thu Jan 20, 2011 8:08 pm



    July 28, 1973
    Just signed a record deal with one of the top producers in Hollywood. Life can't really get any better than this.
    I don't really know how to start. I guess writing in a journal isn't for me, but I still wanna do it. I wanna do it
    because if I ever make it big, I'll want to be able to write an autobiography. And it'd be so easy if I start it now.
    I know I'm being optimistic, but I just signed an amazing record deal with my band, Moksha. After a ton of
    meetings that I had to wear a suit to, and a shit ton of papers that I had to pretend to read, we did it. We got
    signed. And now I'm just waiting. Maybe I'll write some lyrics in here. I know I have my lyrics journal for that,
    but whatever. Maybe I'll just combine it. Or maybe I'll sketch some funny pictures. I dunno, but this journal will
    be worth thousands one day, just because I wrote it. Can't fucking wait.

    Dr. Vigna raised her hand, signaling me to stop reading.
    "Do you remember how you felt when you wrote that?" she asked, looking at me over the top of her dark red eyeglasses.
    I pursed my lips together, it's a face I make when I'm trying to think, and squinted, trying to remember.
    "I guess I felt hopeful. And excited," I said as I stared at my shoe.
    "Yes. Well, can you describe yourself at that time? As in, how you looked, what you were up to?"
    I raised an eyebrow, "How is this gonna help me?"
    She gave me an exasperated look, "You have asked me that at least four times today. Just answer the question."
    "Fine, whatever. I guess I was young. Twenty one years old. Summer after my junior year of college. Me and my band were trying to find gigs and shit to do for the summer. We'd play until mad late and then tell girls how we were in a band and get laid. I think I hooked up with several high school girls, but they lied about their age and I didn't really care. I basically thought I was hot shit. I thought I could do anything and anyone and I'd be okay. At that time I had blond hair, but like a dark blond that looks almost brown, but gets all of these highlights in the summer. Girls like blond guys with blue eyes. I always wanted to dye it black or really dark brown, but I kept it blond for the girls."
    As I said that, I ran a hand through my now dark brown hair, thinking about how many times I have dyed it.
    "Okay, then what happened after you signed the deal?" asked Dr. Vigna.
    "It'd be easier if I just read the journal," I suggested.
    She nodded in agreement and I picked up the dark brown leather notebook.





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    Post by sb Thu Jan 20, 2011 8:53 pm

    I really like the journal idea. Like switching from past to present.

    Keep going. You're wonderful, as always.
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    Post by allee<3 Thu Jan 20, 2011 9:21 pm

    great ideaaa! (:
    continue please.
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    Post by charmischelsea Thu Jan 20, 2011 9:23 pm

    yes, i agree with the present&past themes. and um, can your text entry be on july 28th? that's my birthday(: hehe!!
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    Post by chronic Thu Jan 20, 2011 9:51 pm

    hahaha sure gurrlll changing it Smile
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    Post by chronic Thu Jan 20, 2011 9:51 pm

    and thanks everyone!
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    Post by charmischelsea Thu Jan 20, 2011 10:09 pm

    hahaha, oh you didn't have to change it(: but thank youu!
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    Post by allie Thu Jan 20, 2011 10:49 pm

    I love it so far!
    yeah the only thing is the tenses.
    HAHAHAHAHAHA mmkay so I totally thought it was Dr. Vagina....wow I'm dumb
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    Post by chronic Thu Jan 20, 2011 11:17 pm

    hahahahah vigna pronounced vee-nya
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    Post by Lexi Fri Jan 21, 2011 1:27 am

    I love it so far... Actually I was going to start a story something like this because the 70s were some crazy times man..

    Haha just kidding I don't say man normally
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    Post by claire Fri Jan 21, 2011 6:30 pm

    i lyk dis continue please
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    Post by sof,or something Mon Jan 24, 2011 12:29 am

    CONTINUE
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    Post by chronic Tue Jan 25, 2011 9:50 pm



    July 31st, 1973
    We finished recording today and we're dropping a single to the
    radio stations tomorrow. Hopefully it'll all go well and the stations
    will play it. It's a good song. I wrote it and have this really sick
    guitar solo. Sidd has a drum solo which he totally digs. It's a way
    groovy tune and it's gonna get us so laid. Mack was freaking out
    today because he gets really crazy with nerve-racking stuff like
    this. I mean, I'm pretty psyched, too, but I'm not going insane. I'm
    being way optimistic, maybe a tad overboard, but whatever. If we
    actually make it big, I don't know how happy I'll be. I really don't.
    The producers are having Mack dye his hair red because he's just
    the bass and doesn't really have a thing. Like I'm the lead singer
    and guitarist and I'm pretty hot. Sidd is the drummer and he's just
    undeniably cool. His arms are covered in tattoos, and even though
    he's thin and isn't jacked, he looks pretty badass. Mack just kind of
    stands there so bright red hair will be pretty cool on him. Plus he
    has blue eyes so it's supposed to be cool. I don't really give a shit
    as long as it's gonna make us famous.

    I stopped at the end of the page and looked up at Dr. Vigna.
    "Did you really not care about the changes happening in the band?" she asked.
    I looked at her quizzically, "Of course I didn't care. I knew the producers knew what they were doing and the changes weren't affecting me in any way."
    She raised an eyebrow and quickly took notes, as if she was in some sort of rush to write everything down as quickly as possible.
    "Okay. How did Mack feel knowing he didn't 'really have a thing'?" she asked, putting air quotes around the words I had used in the journal.
    I shrugged, "We didn't really talk about it. And he did have a thing. The red hair kinda became his thing."
    Dr. Vigna nodded, "Interesting."
    "Not really," I said, "It's exactly what I read. Are you even paying attention?"
    "Of course I am. I know what I am doing. You say you want help, please just listen to me and don't question it."
    "That's what I've been hearing from those producers since 1973."
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    Post by chronic Tue Jan 25, 2011 11:17 pm

    bump it up, hoes
    Very Happy
    criticism greatlly appreciated
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    Post by AshleyBrooke Tue Jan 25, 2011 11:50 pm

    love it(:
    continue!
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    Post by allee<3 Wed Jan 26, 2011 12:00 am

    continue on pleaseee!
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    Post by Lee Wed Jan 26, 2011 12:59 pm

    mir i love this! Very Happy
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    Post by amber- Sat Jan 29, 2011 10:22 pm

    I HAVE A CRITIQUE.

    Make these posts longer! They're good! =D

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