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    Post by sb Tue Jun 01, 2010 9:46 pm


    the jerk.


    The Jerk Forthe10



    My name is Mitchell Green, but you can call me Mitch. I’m twenty-two years old, and I’m from Cincinnati. I’m an intern at Mercy Medical Center in the suburbs just outside my hometown. I had a dog up until two months ago. Her name was Roxy, she was a German shepherd, and she got hit by a moving van in front of my house. I’m going to miss her. Other than that, I’m a pretty boring guy.

    Oh, yeah, another thing: I’m in love with Heather McCrery. The problem? So is her best friend, Simon Callahan, and he’ll do anything to steal her away from me.

    Like he just did.

    At the altar.

    During my wedding.

    To Heather.

    They’re both gone now. They’ve escaped on his Harley Davidson motorcycle; the one Heather has never approved of. Ironic? Yes.

    So, basically, I was just left at the altar by the love of my life and her asshole of a best friend. Now, I’m running through the streets of Cincinnati, chasing a motorcycle I can barely see because my fiancé’s best friend decided he was going to perform a perfect speech, at the perfect time, to win the hearts of every single person in the church. That includes Heather.

    God damn him.

    And his stupid motorcycle.

    And his unbelievable charm.

    And his ability to steal the woman I love.

    The motorcycle turns a corner, and it’s gone. Just like that, it’s gone. I can’t run anymore; I can’t chase it anymore—I can’t chase her anymore. I’ll admit it. I lost.

    I’m the jerk, he’s the best friend, she’s the perfect woman, and I lost. Because that’s how it always is. The best friend always gets the girl.

    I sit down on a bench and take off my tuxedo jacket. I ignore the crazy looks from people passing by. I don’t really care anymore. Because I lost her; I lost the only girl I’ll ever love. I might as well tell you the rest now, too.

    This is the story; the story about why Heather McCrery chose me, the jerk, out of the hundreds of guys fawning over her, and why her best friend stole her away from me, the jerk.

    This is the story about why the jerk always loses.



    AN: Oh my God, seriously. Have you ever felt sorry for the guy left standing at the altar when the best friend ruins the wedding?! I have, sooo many times. Anyway, this is kind of a work in progress, and I'll probably focus more on it when I'm finished with The Almost Forever Girl, which by the way, will be finished.
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    Post by sb Tue Jun 01, 2010 9:47 pm

    saved.
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    Post by claire Tue Jun 01, 2010 10:44 pm

    love! i can't wait for more.


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    Post by chronic Tue Jun 01, 2010 10:49 pm

    love it so farr! Smile
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    Post by allie Tue Jun 01, 2010 10:55 pm

    sarahbeth.

    this.

    is.

    fucking.

    amazing.

    end of story.
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    Post by ibelieveinfairies Tue Jun 01, 2010 11:30 pm

    Love this<3
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    Post by Braelyn. Wed Jun 02, 2010 5:59 am

    As I've said.
    I love the new angle and approach.
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    Post by allee<3 Wed Jun 02, 2010 11:35 am

    Really good (:
    I always feel sorry for the guy that has no wife at the end of his wedding day.
    It makes me sad.
    Anyways,
    Super amazing.
    Write more soon!
    Yep,
    I'm rambling.
    Kay, bye.
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    Post by tibby Thu Jun 03, 2010 5:21 pm

    more more moree:)
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    Post by Kathy Fri Jun 04, 2010 4:42 pm

    looove(:
    i can't wait to read more!
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    (woa, are pigs flying? I'm in the writers section!)
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    Post by sb Sat Jun 05, 2010 2:40 am

    Kathy... Are you feeling well?
    What brings you to my neck of the woods? x]
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    Post by sb Mon Jun 07, 2010 1:38 am

    chapter one: past.

    Heather jumped into my arms, nearly knocking me to the ground in her excitement. “Mitch!” She squealed as I set her down. She shoved a white piece of paper in my face. “Look at that.”

    I pushed the paper back a little bit and stared at her grades. “You’re a genius,” I told her honestly, because that was the truth.

    “Perfect four-point-oh,” She gushed, not even bothering to deny that she was a genius.

    It wasn’t that I minded, though. I liked how Heather didn’t fish for compliments. She took a compliment and just slipped it into her back pocket, whereas most girls would frame it and stare at it for about five hours and complain about how untrue it was.

    Nah, Heather wasn’t like that. And that’s why I loved her.

    “Let me see your grades.”

    I blinked and looked down at her. The spatter of freckles across her nose had faded with summer, and her big, hazel-green eyes shined up at me with their usual excitement. Her long, dark hair was everywhere, filled with static from her fuzzy scarf.

    “Um,” I stalled, touching my back jeans’ pocket where my crumpled report card sat. “I’d rather you not.”

    She frowned. “Mitch, I’m sure they’re not that bad.”

    I looked down at my torn-up Nikes. Yeah, they actually were, compared to hers. “Well, er—”

    Heather reached around me and stuffed her hand into my pocket, fishing out the wrinkled report card. Before I could protest, her eyes were scanning the page. Then, she looked up at me and smiled. “You’re the genius,” She said. “Five Bs and two Cs? Mitch, that’s awesome!”

    No, it wasn’t, but I didn’t say anything as she hugged me again. “We’re going out to lunch, right? To celebrate our finishing of college?”

    “Yes,” I said, perking up a little bit. Lunch with Heather did sound pretty great. I slid my arm around her shoulder and led her to my car. “How about that nice Italian place? Oh, what’s it called—”

    “Mind if Simon comes along?”

    I stopped walking. Simon, as in Heather’s best friend since diapers, Simon? Simon, the guy who was in love with Heather, and has been since before I even met either of them. Simon, the guy who loved nothing more than to watch me crash and burn, the guy who would love to see Heather dump me miserably. That Simon?

    No, I didn’t mind at all if he came along. Not.

    “Sure,” I said through gritted teeth. It wasn’t too big of a deal, but I tried to avoid Simon in every way possible, as least until Heather and I got married and moved away, which, by the way, was definitely the plan. I hoped.

    “Thanks,” She said, and there was genuine gratitude in her tone. She smiled up at me, and the dimple on her right cheek appeared as it always did.

    I reached out and brushed it with my thumb. I automatically grinned back; she always did have the most irresistible smile.

    “You’re such a trooper,” She praised, lacing her fingers with mine as we continued to my car.
    The moment was perfect bliss, that is, until I saw Simon sitting on the hood of my car. Honestly, he had the nerve to sit on my car? My 1987 navy blue Camaro that was a gift from my father for my eighteenth birthday?

    I admit, thinking back on it now, it was really trivial of me to be so protective of a car, but that car had sentimental value. And seeing that loser prop himself on it as if he owned it made me want to explode.

    But for Heather, I refrained.

    “Hey, Mitchell,” Simon greeted me smugly.

    I gritted my teeth to keep from snapping back. Another asshole thing he did; he called me by my full name. “Simon.” I nodded curtly.

    Simon slid off the hood and embraced Heather in a very friendly hug.

    I silently dared him to move his hand any lower on her back. But I managed to keep a cool and collected expression, despite my insides screaming to rip his head off.

    For Heather, I reminded myself. “Ready to go?” I asked her, hoping she’d get the hint that I didn’t want Simon to ride with us.

    She didn’t. “Yeah, I’m ready. Simon, why don’t you come with us? I hate that stupid bike; you’re going to get yourself killed one of these days…”

    And so it began. Their mindless chatter continued throughout the whole car ride, and I sat silently in the driver’s seat, only listening to what Heather had to say. She, of course, had a lot to say, and everything she said was important.

    At least to me.



    AN: Hehehe, I love Mitch. He's such a cutie. Oh, and as for the chapter title; they'll make sense as the story moves forward. Comments, please Smile
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    Post by Morgayne Mon Jun 07, 2010 1:42 am

    aww I love it so much SB!
    continuecontinuecontinuecontinue!
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    Post by Kathy Mon Jun 07, 2010 1:05 pm

    sb wrote:Kathy... Are you feeling well?
    What brings you to my neck of the woods? x]

    I'm not sure.
    Usually i try not to read online stories.
    But I love romance stories, and i hear your the best writer out there,
    so i gave it another shot (:

    and it's awesome!!! Smile
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    Post by allie Mon Jun 07, 2010 4:35 pm

    love it!
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    Post by claire Mon Jun 07, 2010 4:44 pm

    brilliant as usual. :]
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    Post by allee<3 Mon Jun 07, 2010 5:32 pm

    Wonderfullll...
    loveeeee!
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    Post by addieee, Mon Jun 07, 2010 7:10 pm

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    Post by Braelyn. Tue Jun 08, 2010 7:02 am

    addie ( : wrote:The Jerk 887104
    so this basically explains it.
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    Post by Snookers Tue Jun 08, 2010 1:12 pm

    Braelyn. wrote:
    addie ( : wrote:The Jerk 887104
    so this basically explains it.

    no. love<3
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    Post by Lee Fri Jun 11, 2010 6:30 pm

    this is amazing sb
    mitch sounds like a cutie<3
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    Post by IZZY Thu Jun 17, 2010 9:32 pm

    Lee wrote:this is amazing sb
    mitch sounds like a cutie<3

    he does!
    please continue? <3

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